The prologue of Blood and Soul definitely needs some editing but before I do so I could use some professional help.
Sorry Sotek, it's a google docx.
The prologue of Blood and Soul definitely needs some editing but before I do so I could use some professional help.
Sorry Sotek, it's a google docx.
Alright, I went through and got all that I could see that needed correcting or otherwise. Good start, but, my opinion only on this matter, isn't the armor the Argonian starts in a bit otherworldly? Unless you have a full fledged plan and reason for it, I retract my concern on it
Alright, I went through and got all that I could see that needed correcting or otherwise. Good start, but, my opinion only on this matter, isn't the armor the Argonian starts in a bit otherworldly? Unless you have a full fledged plan and reason for it, I retract my concern on it
Fixed the mechanical errors and you had quite a few issues with tense because, I think, you were confused about some elements of first person narrative. I fixed those.
How old is this guy? Was just curious, as that would put him, not sure? Did he train when he was very young, like a shadowscale? At the very least, if he was trained as a shadowscale, he'd be close to 70 by the beginning of Skyrim?
Fixed the mechanical errors and you had quite a few issues with tense because, I think, you were confused about some elements of first person narrative. I fixed those.
How old is this guy? Was just curious, as that would put him, not sure? Did he train when he was very young, like a shadowscale? At the very least, if he was trained as a shadowscale, he'd be close to 70 by the beginning of Skyrim?
In all honesty I would create a basic profile just for yourself at this time. Once you have a few chapters up then consider posting it in the RP section.
As you have one for yourself, you will find it grows as you write more. That's why I suggest youhold back before posting it. It will be all the better for it.
In all honesty I would create a basic profile just for yourself at this time. Once you have a few chapters up then consider posting it in the RP section.
As you have one for yourself, you will find it grows as you write more. That's why I suggest youhold back before posting it. It will be all the better for it.
I was going to guess vampire. A thing to consider. The setting and the circumstances. 174 Imperial City is pretty war torn, I'm assuming this is before the sacking of the City, yes? I'm not quite sure how Imperial military would react to a vampire in Daedric armor walking in their ranks and being accepting of him. I mean, Lycanthropy is very illegal in the Imperial Legion, and vampirism has a bounty as well. Does this guy have a way to disguise his vampirism?
That being said, I apologize. I just tend to think very heavily about lore and you said it very clearly in your TOC that you would be breaking it, so I won't say anymore.
I was going to guess vampire. A thing to consider. The setting and the circumstances. 174 Imperial City is pretty war torn, I'm assuming this is before the sacking of the City, yes? I'm not quite sure how Imperial military would react to a vampire in Daedric armor walking in their ranks and being accepting of him. I mean, Lycanthropy is very illegal in the Imperial Legion, and vampirism has a bounty as well. Does this guy have a way to disguise his vampirism?
That being said, I apologize. I just tend to think very heavily about lore and you said it very clearly in your TOC that you would be breaking it, so I won't say anymore.