God shit...Mer please feel free to give me a good ole' smack in the face for not commenting, I'd come by originally and just wanted to see a bit more before dropping my comment. Now I feel super terrible for being late with anything :(

 

I've got absolutely nothing to say about the actual elements of the build that you've put in so far. The skill-line looks interesting and your explanation for the perks is excellent, the Roleplaying sections are really good at showing off the character, though I would love to see a bit more (and a Backstory) but what's there is good. What I do think needs some work, however, is the presentation. I don't know if it's entirely me being overly obsessive about presentation, but I just think there are some flaws that make it a bit harder to read easily.

The main thing is just using the larger sized text. I don't know how to explain it, but when a build pops up and has larger text throughout the build, it just looks...off. It could just be the fact that the vast majority of builds use the default text size (and just about everything else does) but it makes reading the build just difficult. What I'd recommend is just testing what it looks like if you revert the text back to the default size (which you can do by clicking on Font Sizes, and just selecting whichever size it's currently at to disable it). Keep the titles at the same size, but think about reducing the size of the main paragraphs. This just comes down to personal preference really, I dunno, I'm trying to justify it beyond 'I think it looks better the other way' but I'm having trouble. I know I've done it before but...

 

Anyway, that's all I have for now. Sorry about the long message, seeming a bit more negative. The build itself is great so far, looking forward to what else you do with it from here :)

Hey Merc, how's this going? 

Do you mind a suggestion? Ever thought of text-wrapping? You can put an image to the left or right and then you can get the text to wrap. It breaks up the look from the "everything is centered" format and can look really cool. 

I have both heard of it and tried to emulate in formatting. It did not go well, but I’ll try it again later. Build goes well, but my playtest ground to a halt when work went nuts and the holidays reared, so I’ve been trying to catch up on it. It’s been a slow, but mighty, playthrough. I’m considering removing illusion from the build entirely, as I’m not really using it. We’ll see how the rest of the 20s and 30s go.

So my life in December kind of went haywire. Work got kind of insanely busy, so I’ve been putting in 60-70 hours a week. On top of that Christmas got super involved, and now we’ve just finished moving a family member to a new facility, so I simply have not had time time finish this build. Apologies. I’ll polish it and put it out when I can.