The Hunter and The Prey Vol.2

  • Momo gasped as She saw two corpses in a River of blood on the floor. the Smell was horrible. Momo inspected the bodies and muttered " about one week old, i assume Bandits attacked them". Momo got back up and walked slowly around the Manor. While searching the Manor Momo jumped up due to a Noise in the Basement. Momo whispered over to Frostbite "did you hear that". "It sound like ... a pickaxe, no a bunch of Pickaxes" replied Frostbite. The two Adventurers walked over to the Basement Hatch in the Floor. "a Blood trail, look" Momo whispered while opening the hatch.They climbed down and find an empty Basement with a freshly opened tunnel to the East side. the echoing sound of Pickaxes hitting the walls almost like a Rythmic Drum drew them inside the Tunnel. "Wait a Second isn't this the direction to the Crypt Ustengrav" asked Frostbite concerned. "look a Lightsource, lets hurry" said Momo while gracefully jumping over bits and pieces of stone rubble. They burst into a room filled with coffins and dead Draugr.

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  • Sotek
    Sotek   ·  August 25
    Can I suggest something Vezrabuto?
    I'd consider breaking this down a bit so it isn't a singular block. We have two people speaking here so by breaking it up, It helps to clarify who is talking. 
    Something like this. 

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    • Vezrabuto
      Vezrabuto
      Sotek
      Sotek
      Sotek
      Can I suggest something Vezrabuto?
      I'd consider breaking this down a bit so it isn't a singular block. We have two people speaking here so by breaking it up, It helps to clarify who is talking. 
      Something like this. 
      ...  more
        ·  August 25
      I have a Question. is it normal that i can only type that much? because i see all these Builds and Chapters with like a 700 words and spacing and pictures.
      • Sotek
        Sotek
        Vezrabuto
        Vezrabuto
        Vezrabuto
        I have a Question. is it normal that i can only type that much? because i see all these Builds and Chapters with like a 700 words and spacing and pictures.
          ·  August 26
        As to regards of typing quantity, you haven't looked at Lissette Long Chapper's story have you? 10,000 words plus in each chapter.....


        Everyone writes what they are comfortable with. I try to write between 2000 to 5000 depending on ch...  more
        • Vezrabuto
          Vezrabuto
          Sotek
          Sotek
          Sotek
          As to regards of typing quantity, you haven't looked at Lissette Long Chapper's story have you? 10,000 words plus in each chapter.....


          Everyone writes what they are comfortable with. I try to write between 2000 to 5000 depending on chapter and events w...  more
            ·  August 26
          Thanks bu i meant that i have a blockade. all chapters are maximum size i cant type more than that. it wont let me write more. im using the ps3 for this since my pc is broken. 
    • Vezrabuto
      Vezrabuto
      Sotek
      Sotek
      Sotek
      Can I suggest something Vezrabuto?
      I'd consider breaking this down a bit so it isn't a singular block. We have two people speaking here so by breaking it up, It helps to clarify who is talking. 
      Something like this. 
      ...  more
        ·  August 25
      Yes i'll do that next time was just a little worried about the max. letter count ^^
  • Paws
    Paws   ·  August 23
    So the house, Windstad Manner? With a basement leading to Jurgen's Tomb. Pretty cool!
    Also, content posted from 21st August can be mentioned in the Roundup Submissions thread. Don't be shy :)
    http://tamrielvault.com/groups/topic/view/grou...  more
    • Vezrabuto
      Vezrabuto
      Paws
      Paws
      Paws
      So the house, Windstad Manner? With a basement leading to Jurgen's Tomb. Pretty cool!
      Also, content posted from 21st August can be mentioned in the Roundup Submissions thread. Don't be shy :)
      http://tamrielvault.com/groups/topic/view/group_id/16/topic_id/9179
        ·  August 23
      yep Windstad Manor ^^ what is the Round up for? im quite new to the site ^^ 
      • Paws
        Paws
        Vezrabuto
        Vezrabuto
        Vezrabuto
        yep Windstad Manor ^^ what is the Round up for? im quite new to the site ^^ 
          ·  August 23
        Welcome, then :) The Roundup is the Admin's and Host's of this site way of making sure the content created gets recognised by featuring all new works on a weekly basis, and by sending them out in an email so that when we are away we can each keep track of...  more
        • Vezrabuto
          Vezrabuto
          Paws
          Paws
          Paws
          Welcome, then :) The Roundup is the Admin's and Host's of this site way of making sure the content created gets recognised by featuring all new works on a weekly basis, and by sending them out in an email so that when we are away we can each keep track of...  more
            ·  August 23
          I Like this, would be a shame if someones work just slips through the cracks and gets no attention. I posted my Vol.1 thanks for letting me now My Man. : D