Its hard to list a particular example, but you want to cut out any words that dont contribute to better understanding what you're trying to convey.
I also feel like the backstory could be broken up into small paragraphs. The large block of text is unappealing. Place that picture you have below the backstory above it to draw readers in.
Its hard to list a particular example, but you want to cut out any words that dont contribute to better understanding what you're trying to convey.
I also feel like the backstory could be broken up into small paragraphs. The large block of text is unappealing. Place that picture you have below the backstory above it to draw readers in.