Hey Kodaav. I'm never super critical when I see a build first getting dropped in the 'Shop because it's impossible to tell where the build is up to on release. Uh, for now all I can really say is that I'd recommend breaking it apart a little bit, just to make it easier to read for now. Just moving things around so that it's not just a giant block of text would make it a lot easier to get a feel for what's going on.

That could just be me, I've got terrible vision so reading things like that is sorta difficult. Anyway, I did end up breaking it apart so I could read it (otherwise I'd end it there) and I threw it below just to give you some ideas for how to set it up, but yeah man I really like it so far. Seems like an interesting story for an interesting character.  So yeah, eager to see more mate :D

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Race: Redguard

Standing Stone: Lord

Major Skills: One-Handed, Enchanting, Destruction, Alchemy.

Minor Skills: Heavy Armor, Smithing, Alteration.

Alignment: Chaotic Good

Brief Description:

Hammerfell may be my home, but something deep within my soul is calling me to Skyrim. I have packed what little possessions I have, and a band of Iron Orcs have taken my good sword and armor as payment for crossing their territory. They only allowed me to keep a dull iron sword (that can barely cut through butter, I might add) in the event that I need to defend myself. I notice the empty border as I cross into Falkreath Hold. There are many deer here, and the mountains stick up like jagged icy teeth on the horizon. I stop in the inn for a drink, and that is where my story truly began... I have stumbled upon the ruins of a village near Pale Pass. A Dragon... rose from the smoldering embers of the city and flew off towards the northeast. I rushed in to see if there were any survivors. All I smelled was charred wood and flesh and all I saw was ruins.

I stumbled upon the body of a man who appeared to be writing in a journal. Apparently, there was an execution going on. A Nord called Ulfric Stormcloak was being executed for crimes against Skyrim and inciting rebellion against the Empire. A dragon shows up and starts burning the city and everyone in it, and that's pretty much it. That weird feeling came back suddenly. I have not been the same since I stumbled upon that ruin in Craglorn... (Back in Craglorn)

I was investigating bandit activity in Craglorn. An old Nordic ruin in the hills. I've heard stories about creatures called Draugr rising from their tombs killing anyone who dares disturb their eternal slumber. I've always thought they were just stories mother's tell their children to keep them from playing too far from home. I see remnants of a bandit camp outside, but no sign of them. I open old stone doors, and stumble into a massive chamber. It's dimly lit by the sun shining through cracks in the walls and roof, but I plainly see a stone sarcophagus and a large wall behind it. The writing appears ancient and unrecognizable. Suddenly, the writing starts to flow, and I hear words I have never heard before rushing to my ears. I feel faint...

Closing Notes

This is just a sounding board (which hopefully doesn't sound bored!) for a build idea I've been thinking on. Feel to critique the narrative thus far.