Radiance Lost

  • Alone, loyal but full of doubt,
    The shaken faith of the ever-devout,
    A heart-break at being cast out,
    Craving love while living without.

    The scintilla who fears not the dark,
    Yet ever waits for that one remark,
    A colourful rain-curtained spark,
    Bringing light to a life so stark.

    An emotion the colour of condemn,
    Seen in glistening facets of every gem,
    An orphaned star with a severed stem,
    If they love Her not, how can Her love reach them?

Comments

17 Comments   |   The Long-Chapper and 7 others like this.
  • Karver the Lorc
    Karver the Lorc   ·  September 14, 2016
    Poor star-orphan who is even orphan among orphans. :)
  • Ben W
    Ben W   ·  September 12, 2016
    Why am I reminded Knight-Commander Meredith reading this thing
    • WuYiXiang
      WuYiXiang
      Ben W
      Ben W
      Ben W
      Why am I reminded Knight-Commander Meredith reading this thing
        ·  September 12, 2016
      Who now?
    • Paws
      Paws
      Ben W
      Ben W
      Ben W
      Why am I reminded Knight-Commander Meredith reading this thing
        ·  September 12, 2016
      Not sure, who is this Meredith?
      • A-Pocky-Hah!
        A-Pocky-Hah!
        Paws
        Paws
        Paws
        Not sure, who is this Meredith?
          ·  September 12, 2016
        Knight-Commander Meredith is a character from Dragon Age II. She leads the Templar faction in Kirkwall.
        • Paws
          Paws
          A-Pocky-Hah!
          A-Pocky-Hah!
          A-Pocky-Hah!
          Knight-Commander Meredith is a character from Dragon Age II. She leads the Templar faction in Kirkwall.
            ·  September 12, 2016
          Ah thanks Revs. DAII was the one I didn't play.
          • Ben W
            Ben W
            Paws
            Paws
            Paws
            Ah thanks Revs. DAII was the one I didn't play.
              ·  September 13, 2016
            It could be because the last line reminded me of the voice actress specifically; she voiced Meridia and Meredith
            • A-Pocky-Hah!
              A-Pocky-Hah!
              Ben W
              Ben W
              Ben W
              It could be because the last line reminded me of the voice actress specifically; she voiced Meridia and Meredith
                ·  September 13, 2016
              Mer idia and Mer edith... Coincidence? I think not!! :-O
  • Sotek
    Sotek   ·  September 12, 2016
    I've missed your poems Phil. Great work as always.
    • Paws
      Paws
      Sotek
      Sotek
      Sotek
      I've missed your poems Phil. Great work as always.
        ·  September 12, 2016
      Thanks Sotek. This one was about Meridia, not sure how much of that came through.
      • WuYiXiang
        WuYiXiang
        Paws
        Paws
        Paws
        Thanks Sotek. This one was about Meridia, not sure how much of that came through.
          ·  September 12, 2016
        I thought the subject matter seemed familiar. :|
        • Paws
          Paws
          WuYiXiang
          WuYiXiang
          WuYiXiang
          I thought the subject matter seemed familiar. :|
            ·  September 12, 2016
          Should I make a key and de-mistify it?
          • WuYiXiang
            WuYiXiang
            Paws
            Paws
            Paws
            Should I make a key and de-mistify it?
              ·  September 12, 2016
            Nah. It feels so obvious in retrospect, though I suppose capitalizing "her" would make it more clear that you're talking about someone specific, kind of like how Christians capitalize "God" as opposed to "god".
            • Paws
              Paws
              WuYiXiang
              WuYiXiang
              WuYiXiang
              Nah. It feels so obvious in retrospect, though I suppose capitalizing "her" would make it more clear that you're talking about someone specific, kind of like how Christians capitalize "God" as opposed to "god".
                ·  September 12, 2016
              Good call, I may well do that. That line was just a rework of her dialogue in-game "If they love me not, how can my love reach them?" I wrote it all in first person but it didn't work so well :S
              • WuYiXiang
                WuYiXiang
                Paws
                Paws
                Paws
                Good call, I may well do that. That line was just a rework of her dialogue in-game "If they love me not, how can my love reach them?" I wrote it all in first person but it didn't work so well :S
                  ·  September 12, 2016
                "If they love me not, how can my love reach them?" - Ah, that's one of my favorite lines. I really love Meridia.


                Yeah, I can see how first-person wouldn't work so well here. :S
  • The Long-Chapper
    The Long-Chapper   ·  September 12, 2016
    Another fine poem, Phil. I should just have you write Albee's poems. YAY! I have brilliant ideas.  :D
    • Paws
      Paws
      The Long-Chapper
      The Long-Chapper
      The Long-Chapper
      Another fine poem, Phil. I should just have you write Albee's poems. YAY! I have brilliant ideas.  :D
        ·  September 12, 2016
      Haah, now that truly would be a pleasure :D