Raan Mir

  • Heavy fog, a blanket, over ancient bows drape,

    Old trunk, gnarly branches, creates an eerie shape,

    Distant mountains, far foreboding, against the sky scrape,

    The hunted runs, eyes darting, searching for escape.

    Forest silent, animals quiet, the only noise a ragged gasp,

    Nameless horror, ancient foe, a hand reaching out to grasp.

    Twigs break, hunted stumbles, tumbling to the ground,

    A looming terror, presence felt, pursuing like a hound,

    Heartbeat racing, anxiety gripping, chest feeling every pound,

    The hunted rises, continues on, a strangled sob the only sound.

    A dappled clearing, hopeful light, towards the hunted ran,

    Crashing branches, desperate flight, to evade the Woodland Man.

    Canopy breaks, azure sky, birdsong reaches ear,

    A circle of grass, verdant green, a peaceful atmosphere,

    The hunted halts, heart calming, mastering his fear,

    Now hunted hunts, knowledge prey, known as the Wood-Seer.

Comments

8 Comments
  • Edana
    Edana   ·  June 11, 2016
    Wowwww... this poem is AMAZING. I too love the cadence here. :D Be proud of this one, Phil. It's freaking awesome!! Maybe my favorite yet!!
  • Sildriel
    Sildriel   ·  June 10, 2016
    This is so exciting! Although the rhyme scheme is quite simple, I got chills after the second verse. Good job!
  • Justiciar Thorien
    Justiciar Thorien   ·  June 10, 2016
    Then try something new more often. Because every time you do that' it's more and more awesome))
  • Paws
    Paws   ·  June 10, 2016
    Aww, thank you all. Been a while, tried something new, glad it worked. 
  • Justiciar Thorien
    Justiciar Thorien   ·  June 10, 2016
    Wow, Phil... You just went beyond anything you have written before)) This is unbelievably beautiful. And because there's HM, it's even more awesome.
  • Vulkhammar
    Vulkhammar   ·  June 10, 2016
    Nice imagery, easy to bring it to mind!
  • The Wing
    The Wing   ·  June 10, 2016
    The metre of this poem is absolutely brilliant! That consistent comma placement makes me giddy, oh my! I love it when poets and writers use punctuation to encourage the mind to pick up the mood.  The cadence of the poem echoes the rhythm of breathless pan...  more
  • Karver the Lorc
    Karver the Lorc   ·  June 10, 2016
    Wood-Seer. Huh. If that is what I think it is...
    HYPE!