Momo gasped as She saw two corpses in a River of blood on the floor. the Smell was horrible. Momo inspected the bodies and muttered " about one week old, i assume Bandits attacked them". Momo got back up and walked slowly around the Manor. While searching the Manor Momo jumped up due to a Noise in the Basement. Momo whispered over to Frostbite "did you hear that". "It sound like ... a pickaxe, no a bunch of Pickaxes" replied Frostbite. The two Adventurers walked over to the Basement Hatch in the Floor. "a Blood trail, look" Momo whispered while opening the hatch.They climbed down and find an empty Basement with a freshly opened tunnel to the East side. the echoing sound of Pickaxes hitting the walls almost like a Rythmic Drum drew them inside the Tunnel. "Wait a Second isn't this the direction to the Crypt Ustengrav" asked Frostbite concerned. "look a Lightsource, lets hurry" said Momo while gracefully jumping over bits and pieces of stone rubble. They burst into a room filled with coffins and dead Draugr.
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I'd consider breaking this down a bit so it isn't a singular block. We have two people speaking here so by breaking it up, It helps to clarify who is talking.
Something like this.
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I'd consider breaking this down a bit so it isn't a singular block. We have two people speaking here so by breaking it up, It helps to clarify who is talking.
Something like this.
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Everyone writes what they are comfortable with. I try to write between 2000 to 5000 depending on ch... more
Everyone writes what they are comfortable with. I try to write between 2000 to 5000 depending on chapter and events w... more
I'd consider breaking this down a bit so it isn't a singular block. We have two people speaking here so by breaking it up, It helps to clarify who is talking.
Something like this.
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Also, content posted from 21st August can be mentioned in the Roundup Submissions thread. Don't be shy
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Also, content posted from 21st August can be mentioned in the Roundup Submissions thread. Don't be shy
http://tamrielvault.com/groups/topic/view/group_id/16/topic_id/9179