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• Daryl Sawatzky

  

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  May 8, 2017

  Testing out an idea for presentation formatting. It seemed like a brilliant idea at first, but i'm starting to think its just going to be illegible.

   

   

  Research Log

  Nathan “Raven” Carlick

  Knight – Brotherhood of Steel

  General of a Commonwealth militia group, The Minutemen

  At the request of Elder Maxon, I have compiled a comprehensive report, including all known documentation of the aforementioned subject, Nathan Carlick; aka, Raven.

  While the subject remains a member of the Brotherhood of Steel in good standing, he has displayed a willingness to act on his own, even against orders. With the influence he wields throughout the commonwealth area, Elder Maxon feels, and I agree, that he is too dangerous of an individual for us to be unaware of his capabilities. The following is a collection of documents recovered from pre-war facilities throughout the commonwealth, in addition to interviews with persons of interest.

  Proctor Quinlan

   

  Document Recovered: Fort Strong – The Commonwealth

  Excerpt of the unfinished memoirs of Colonel Harland Wicks

  United States Army

   

  

   

  Incident Report – Recovered from Fort Bannister – Capital Wasteland

  United States Army

  108^th Infantry Regiment – Armored Division

  Major Ron Wutheford

  

   

  Recovered from Vault Tec Headquarters

  Old Boston - Commonwealth

  *Note: it has become apparent that the subject's contition has improved since initial testing. adjusted scores noted in red.

   

  

   

  Recovered from National Guard Training Center - Commonwealth

  Competency Evaluation Review

   

   

  

   

  

  

   

  Testing out an idea for presentation formatting. It seemed like a brilliant idea at first, but i'm starting to think its just going to be illegible.

   

   

  Research Log

  Nathan “Raven” Carlick

  Knight – Brotherhood of Steel

  General of a Commonwealth militia group, The Minutemen

  At the request of Elder Maxon, I have compiled a comprehensive report, including all known documentation of the aforementioned subject, Nathan Carlick; aka, Raven.

  While the subject remains a member of the Brotherhood of Steel in good standing, he has displayed a willingness to act on his own, even against orders. With the influence he wields throughout the commonwealth area, Elder Maxon feels, and I agree, that he is too dangerous of an individual for us to be unaware of his capabilities. The following is a collection of documents recovered from pre-war facilities throughout the commonwealth, in addition to interviews with persons of interest.

  Proctor Quinlan

   

  Document Recovered: Fort Strong – The Commonwealth

  Excerpt of the unfinished memoirs of Colonel Harland Wicks

  United States Army

   

  

   

  Incident Report – Recovered from Fort Bannister – Capital Wasteland

  United States Army

  108^th Infantry Regiment – Armored Division

  Major Ron Wutheford

  

   

  Recovered from Vault Tec Headquarters

  Old Boston - Commonwealth

  *Note: it has become apparent that the subject's contition has improved since initial testing. adjusted scores noted in red.

   

  

   

  Recovered from National Guard Training Center - Commonwealth

  Competency Evaluation Review

   

   

  

   

  

  

   

• Noodles

  

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  May 9, 2017

  I'll check this out soon, I promise! :)

  I'll check this out soon, I promise! :)
• Mottyskills

  

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  May 10, 2017

  It's cool...but yeah maybe idk...a little hard to read/follow. some of it's too small. 

  but damn creative and a helluva backstory bud

  It's cool...but yeah maybe idk...a little hard to read/follow. some of it's too small. 

  but damn creative and a helluva backstory bud

• FlamezSword

  

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  May 10, 2017

  Did you print out a picture for that last one and then write on it? 

  Seems like an interesting method, but reiterating what Motty said a little bit on the hard side to read

   

  Specificially: The second document's description section is a little small for me, and the last one's writing is a bit on the smaller (a little illegible) side

  That being said i read all of it, but that's my problem

  Did you print out a picture for that last one and then write on it? 

  Seems like an interesting method, but reiterating what Motty said a little bit on the hard side to read

   

  Specificially: The second document's description section is a little small for me, and the last one's writing is a bit on the smaller (a little illegible) side

  That being said i read all of it, but that's my problem

• Daryl Sawatzky

  

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  May 10, 2017

  Ok, I think I can clean them up and make them work. I wanted the second one to look handwritten, but the combination of the font, and the aging just clouds it up.

  The last one, I just tried to be too authentic. Government forms are always poorly spaced for what you need to write. if I space it out a little better, and write a little more legibly, it think i can make it work.

  I still have a lot of work to do. I have field interviews to write, and I have to get back in to play the character again and get some reconnaissance photos.

  Ok, I think I can clean them up and make them work. I wanted the second one to look handwritten, but the combination of the font, and the aging just clouds it up.

  The last one, I just tried to be too authentic. Government forms are always poorly spaced for what you need to write. if I space it out a little better, and write a little more legibly, it think i can make it work.

  I still have a lot of work to do. I have field interviews to write, and I have to get back in to play the character again and get some reconnaissance photos.

• Noodles

  

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  May 10, 2017

  Ok, first of all, love the story from the second picture. I think however that it could look a lot better if you put the text in the discussion and align the eagle picture to the left. Here, it would come out as something like this:

  Report: ###

  Department: -----

  Reporting Officer: ______

  Activity: Recon Patrol

  Insert story here

   

  Also, the special spread is a stroke of genius! :D

  Ok, first of all, love the story from the second picture. I think however that it could look a lot better if you put the text in the discussion and align the eagle picture to the left. Here, it would come out as something like this:

  Report: ###

  Department: -----

  Reporting Officer: ______

  Activity: Recon Patrol

  Insert story here

   

  Also, the special spread is a stroke of genius! :D

• Daryl Sawatzky

  

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  May 11, 2017

  Ok, made some changes. I think it loks a lot better. Still have a lot of writing to do. Trying to present the whole story, but in third party clips and interviews, so it's taking a long time for me to write.

  Ok, made some changes. I think it loks a lot better. Still have a lot of writing to do. Trying to present the whole story, but in third party clips and interviews, so it's taking a long time for me to write.

• FlamezSword

  

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  May 11, 2017

  Daryl Sawatzky said:

  Ok, made some changes. I think it loks a lot better. Still have a lot of writing to do. Trying to present the whole story, but in third party clips and interviews, so it's taking a long time for me to write.

  I like the improvements Daryl! Keep up the brilliant work (much easier to read certain documents now) :P

  [blockquote][b][url=/profile/DarylSawatzky]Daryl Sawatzky[/url] said:[/b]

  Ok, made some changes. I think it loks a lot better. Still have a lot of writing to do. Trying to present the whole story, but in third party clips and interviews, so it's taking a long time for me to write.

  [/blockquote]

  I like the improvements Daryl! Keep up the brilliant work (much easier to read certain documents now) :P

• Daryl Sawatzky

  

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  May 19, 2017

  added a few more images just to check formatting.

  I have a little proofreading still to do, and a couple more images to edit.

  added a few more images just to check formatting.

  I have a little proofreading still to do, and a couple more images to edit.