War Bear

  • Rivers brown from mining ore, bloody war;
    grizzly bear, brown dyed black: sludge and gore.
    Heavy coat, shoulders sag. Old bear;
    dragon stalks you, common mare.
    The forest holds its breath;
    blue eyes reflect green
    and foes unseen.
    Cautious step.
    Exhale --
    Trapped.
     
     

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4 Comments   |   Amornar and 4 others like this.
  • Felkros
    Felkros   ·  August 31
     Wow. I've never been much for poetry, but this brought me in right from the start, until the sudden end. Paws said it best, it's vivid.
    • Legion
      Legion
      Felkros
      Felkros
      Felkros
       Wow. I've never been much for poetry, but this brought me in right from the start, until the sudden end. Paws said it best, it's vivid.
        ·  August 31
      :D Thanks, Felkros. That's a big compliment. I see you're going through my old poetry as well -- I'll tell you up front that it won't be as good. I took some time off to sharpen up my poetry chops, so anything I've made before this just won't be as good. ...  more
  • Paws
    Paws   ·  August 31
    Vivid. The scene can be felt, experienced as if the trees around are closing in. Claustrophobic. 
    • Legion
      Legion
      Paws
      Paws
      Paws
      Vivid. The scene can be felt, experienced as if the trees around are closing in. Claustrophobic. 
        ·  August 31
      Perfect. Exactly what I was going for.